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Here’s the next snippet from Rishalt, Book 2 of Taxyon Space. In May, I hope to introduce you to
my WIP.
Blurb
Dr. Nikki Bell is devastated when the Watchers
reappear without her alien lover. Why did Kiron return to his home planet
without even leaving a message? In search of answers, Nikki jumps at the chance
to join the diplomatic team invited to visit the aliens’ home world. On
Rishalt, she must contend with the intricacies of Warrish society and an
undercurrent of hostility.
Kiron Arqin Ramis is
summoned home by his family to the unwanted honor of a new triad and union with
a high-ranked female. Unable to forget Nikki, he endures a perilous exile on a
wilderness planet instead of complying with his family’s demands. But, the
Triarchs have other plans for him.
Stakes are higher than
the lives of two individuals. Earth leaders are desperate to acquire the
aliens’ interstellar technology, while Warrish dispute the benefit of an
alliance with inferiors. Can Nikki and Kiron pierce the barriers separating
them to find happiness with provoking an unequal war?
Following
the conventions of Warrish society, Kiron’s parents have betrothed him and his
brother to young women of superior rank. Unfortunately, Kiron would prefer the
“primitive Earther” Nikki. He was given three days to reflect.
You can
read last week’s snippet here –
I have
compressed several paragraphs into this snippet.
Kiron paced around the interior of the enclosure, considering
his options. If he stayed inside the stockade, he would wallow in misery,
regretting Nikki and fretting over his lack of freedom. The ocean did not
attract him; he knew its hazards too well. His first triad, his true and
voluntary triad, had come here for their purification ritual; their attempt to
catch fish had nearly ended in disaster. He must hike over the arid hills
rising from the shore and cross a jungle to reach his destination…. the camp he
had built with his triad brothers.
After six days, Kiron flipped off the forcefield and tossed his
heavy pack over the stockade; he hooked a strap over the top rail, braced his
booted feet against the posts, and climbed the fence. Dropping onto the rocky
ground beyond the stockade, he looked around warily. Nothing moved, except for
the dust devils spinning in the wind. He slung the pack over his shoulders and
sprinted toward the range of low hills. Behind him, the forcefield shimmered
into life, cutting off his retreat.
RISHALT
Two alien worlds. Two lovers torn apart. Twist
the hyperthreads into unity.
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As always, I’ll be happy to reply to your comments.
So he's burned his bridges! Don't blame him, I hope he manages to find Nikki.
ReplyDeleteBy an unexpected chance, he does.
DeleteWell, that's going to suck. Great snippet, Aurora. :)
ReplyDeleteHe's made a choice.
DeleteOh no! He seems to have made his decision, but I wonder how he's going to get past the forcefield.
ReplyDeleteHe doesn't want to go back. They can find him if they want to.
DeleteI really like this snippet and the way it's written!
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteGood for him! A worthy hero :)
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteWell good for him - I like that he's done contemplating and is now going to take action! More adventures ahead, I'm sure. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteYes. He'll find plenty of hazards in the wilderness.
DeleteIntriguing. I wonder what he's up to?
ReplyDeleteHe's heading for the camp he built with his ex-triad brothers four years ago.
DeleteYippee! Good for him! That last line re the force field cutting off his retreat - YES!
ReplyDeleteI agree. An emphatic closure.
DeleteWhat an inhospitable world. You've written that well. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks. It gets worse - lol
DeleteGood for him. It's about time he started to take action.
ReplyDeleteYes, he's stuck with no viable options.
DeleteI love that he took action and isn't going to look back. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteNo retreat for him. Good descriptions of where he is and how he got there.
ReplyDeletethank you.
DeleteAwesome snippet, as always!
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteGuess he has to succeed now! Love the bits of backstory interwoven here.
ReplyDeleteHe actually running away.
DeleteOh ... i didn't expect that, but - yeah - good for him. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteHe prefers action to contemplation!
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