Welcome
to another Sunday with Weekend Writing
Warriors. Meet writers in
various genres and read 8-10 sentence snippets of their stories. Find a new
author and sample their work. Enjoy!
This week
I’ve decided to throw my new story at you. It will be book 3 in my series Atrapako on Eden.
The settings are two remote planets: Eden, a terraformed planet with a colony
of humans; and Vkani, an inhospitable planet with scaled human(oid) aliens. You
can read about the planets and their inhabitants in my Blog Post HERE.
Here are
the first, unedited, lines. I’m not sure I have the right balance of action and
introduction yet.
The sandstorm whirled out of the desert and plowed into the
shuttle.
Red grit rattled on the windshield. Startled by the noise, Maya
flinched. Surely the transparent screen wouldn’t crack? The delay bothered her
more than the storm. Her team was about to land and explore the ruins, remnants
of an ancient civilization destroyed millennia ago in a nuclear catastrophe.
She glanced at the tablet embedded in her armrest. Their instruments had
detected the walls of a city under the sand, and she had pinpointed a landing
site in the center of a large complex. But, they had overshot the outlined
walls and were shifting further away.
The shuttle bucked in the violent gusts.
My
tentative title is Trapped on Vkani. It is Sci-Fi romance with a new pair of main characters.
As
advanced preparation, the first book in Atrapako on Eden is on sale for 99c. I
wrote The Lady is Blue about 3
decades ago and finally published it in 2014 at the beginning of my career as
an author of fiction.
SciFi Romance. Feisty scientist solves puzzle
of scaly aliens on the remote planet of Eden.
As always, I’ll be happy to reply to your
comments.
Uh oh! I hope they can land safely. An intriguing introduction!
ReplyDeleteThank you. It's a crashing intro.
DeleteThe storm won't make a pinpoint landing easy. I wonder what they'll do when they land, though, aside from take shelter from the storm. Excavating or even examining a ruin buried under sand can't be easy.
ReplyDeleteThings will get worse.
DeleteHope the shuttle is up to landing in a sandstorm! Good opening.
ReplyDeleteThere will be a complication
DeleteThis sounds like an inhospitable place for an archaeological dig. Interesting, though!
ReplyDeleteVery inhospitable - hot dry and radioactive.
DeleteI think you have a good balance. :-) It has a couple hooks in it.
ReplyDeleteThanks for answering my question.
DeleteOoooo I love all of this, I love stories with ruins with them
ReplyDeleteWell, they won't see much of these ruins.
DeleteThe storm will make landing a bit tricky I would think. Intrigued to know more.
ReplyDeleteGood. Their landing won't be easy.
DeleteYou're off to a heart-pounding new beginning, Aurora! I ready for a rough ride!
ReplyDeleteGreat and thanks!
DeleteGood job describing the effects of the storm. Terrifying. Great beginning.
ReplyDeleteThank you. It will get worse.
DeleteInteresting start to your new story. Good opening with the difficult landing.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteI enjoyed the snippet, a good mix of "uh oh" with the sandstorm and highly intriguing tidbits about the lost city. Great stuff!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks. My alien hero appears in the second chapter.
DeleteI think I'd be scrubbing the mission and heading back to the mother ship until the storm breaks. No sense making things harder for yourself!
ReplyDeleteThey can't. The shuttle can't fly through the sandstorm.
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