Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Meet writers in various genres and read 8-10 sentence snippets of their stories. Find a new author and sample their work. Enjoy!
I’m continuing my new story, Trapped on Vkani, book 3 in my series Atrapako on Eden. The settings are two remote planets: Eden, a terraformed planet with a colony of humans; and Vkani, an inhospitable planet with scaled human(oid) aliens. You can read about the planets and their inhabitants in my Blog Post HERE.
Maya and her team had planned to explore the ruins of an ancient civilization in the radioactive Deadlands. But a sandstorm buried their shuttle under a thick layer of sand. Their air supply is low, and they have to dig to the surface to call for help.
In last week’s snippet, Maya met the blue scaled hero of the story. You can read their dramatic first encounter here - https://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2019/02/large-blue-claws-snippet-from-trapped.html
Excuse my misuse of punctuation as their interaction continues.
It barked a word, an incomprehensible command. Stretching a blue-scaled hand with clawed fingers toward her face, it gripped the neck of her mask.
“No!” she cried, jerking into a sitting position and raising her flattened hand to stop it. Fear sharpened her memories of lessons in the Atrapako language, Kavkani, and she said in halting tones, “Need to breathe.” Not quite correct, but she couldn’t remember their word for nose filter, if such a term existed.
Gripping the hilt of its sword, the Atrapako crouched on one knee at her side and grated, “Worm.” Its voice was as harsh and arid as the landscape of the Deadlands; “Worms crawling out of the dunes; what are you?”
Mentally, she translated the accented Kavkani, and her confidence rose. Looking into the shadowed eyes, she said with improved fluency, “We are not Atrapako; we traveled from another place, a world far from Vkani.”
The Blue growled, “Impossible.”
Marooned on a desolate planet, joining forces with the enemy is their only hope.
Maya Pandita spent years preparing for an expedition to the Deadlands. But her dreams of unearthing ancient artifacts are shattered when her shuttle is buried by a violent sandstorm, and her team is abducted by the scaled inhabitants of the planet. Maya and her companions must try to outwit their blue captor and call for help before they die in the toxic atmosphere.
Sa Vittaran has a problem in his claws. Along with treasures from the ruins, he has retrieved three smooth-skinned foreigners. They will die if he leaves them in the desert. Yet the puny creatures have little value as slaves, except perhaps for the impudent woman who claims to be their leader. He plans to keep her. Her knowledge of the ancient texts will be an asset if she can survive the long trek to his house.
An attack by marauders forces Maya and the Blue leader into a wary alliance. They must work together to thwart the bandits and reunite their company. Can Maya convince Sa Vittaran to help her team? If she fails, they are doomed to a short unpleasant life on the desolate, war-torn planet.
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I like how you wrote her struggling to understand his language. Great snippet!ReplyDelete
Thanks. I had fun writing this scene.Delete
She's lucky that pressure improved her mastery of the alien language. On the rare occasion I try to order dinner in France or Belgium, everything I know about the language flees my mind.ReplyDelete
She is good at languages fortunately.Delete
We had fun ordering in France at a small cafe where they didn't speak English.
Interesting that he came up with "worms" because it does make sense to this human. :) I am enjoying this story!ReplyDelete
thanks - yes, she seems to be burrowing out of the sand.Delete
His perspective is natural, given how he found them! Good interaction here between them.ReplyDelete
Thank you. The interactions between them will drive the plot.Delete
I like the way she keeps her cool, mostly, and works through the discussion. Really enjoyed the excerpt...ReplyDelete
I think she's intrigued by the Blue, although she loses her cool a little later.Delete
Her difficulty to communicate with a language she'd not comfortable with came through. I like the Mr. Blue-scale-hand's perspective of what he thinks they are and how her tale seems fanciful to him. Great scene.ReplyDelete
Yes. But at least he didn't force her to remove the mask.Delete
Well, "worm" is not very flattering, though it's understandable if he's never seen a human before. I wonder if she can convince him?ReplyDelete
He can see her shape, but she's wearing an insulated suit with a pattern of fake scales.Delete
Oooo interesting sci fi set up here!ReplyDelete
Thank you. Much of the world building comes in the first two books.Delete
Mr. blue claws isn't a very sympathetic character at first, but I hope readers will learn to appreciate his finer qualities during th estory.
Good job describing her lack of understanding and inability to breathe the atmosphere.ReplyDelete
A very interesting scenario. It reminded me a bit of the sand worms of Dune.ReplyDelete
It is a desert planet, although no sand worms or psi powers. Also, the aliens have a rigid caste system. No governments are overthrown in this story because the place is pretty lawless.Delete