Saturday, August 27, 2016

Lock him in jail! Snippet from Starrella Falls for #WeWriWa #Superhero #Romance

Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences. Join the fun and read our snippets.

I’m continuing the scene from my latest release: Starrella Falls, Book 2 in the Secret Supers. You can read the first chapters HERE.

Background: The wanted murderer, Croaker, attacks Estelle and Toby knocks him out. Mark and Diane arrive in his car and Mark offers to take Croaker to the police station. I skipped the part where they searched him and removed a gun and poison darts.
The final sentence was: Toby stepped aside and rubbed his hands together, “Better tie his hands.”

“Okay, give me the belt,” Mark pushed their prisoner onto his side, wrenched Croaker’s hands behind his back and wrapped the belt around his wrists.
When he had finished the job, Toby drawled, “Lock him in jail pronto. Don’t know how long he’ll be out and those belts ain’t strong.”
“Correct.” Mark tapped on his phone, “I’ll call Inspector Parkins. He’ll want to see our catch.” After speaking into the phone, he swiveled round to scan the parking lot. Diane and Estelle stood side by side, watching anxiously from a safe distance next to the motorcycle. Mark gestured to the girls and asked, “Will you see them home, Ryan?”
“My pleasure!” Toby grinned.

 Starrella Falls

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48 comments:

  1. I think Toby got the better job!

    I enjoy your dialogue, Aurora. It always flows, so easily.

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  2. They're certainly taking precautions. You can't be too careful.

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    1. One is less and one is more careful than it appears.

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  3. I wonder if Croaker has some tricks up his sleeve!

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  4. Visual, punchy and has a great feel to it. Nice scene, Aurora.

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  5. Glad they're not complacent about Croaker, and Toby's reaction was great.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  6. This Croaker character is scary, and I have a feeling all their precautions might not be enough!

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  7. I agree with the other comments. Croaker is a baddie.

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    1. You should read what he did to his accomplices!

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  8. Looks like they're out of danger... for now. ;)

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  9. I do not trust that belt. Nope. Not at all. Great snippet!

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  10. Hmmm... How did it become "our" catch, Mark? You weren't there for it! And I still think something's not right in his actions; he's still too eager for everyone to be gone and leave him alone with Croaker.

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  11. Oh, I do hope Mark gets Croaker to the station before he wakes. Toby definitely seems to have an easier task. Nice snippet!

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  12. One can never be too careful, but I'm wondering if they were careful enough. Love the banter, too.

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    1. It may take a while to find out at 8-10 sentences a week!

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  13. The choreography in the first paragraph is very well done.

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  14. Oh, interesting! I wonder if he's an accomplice or if he just wants to get the glory of the catch all by himself?

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  15. Somehow I don't think they've seen the last of Croaker... Nice snippet!

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  16. They're taking their job seriously, and that's greatly preferable to scenes where a baddie can escape because of terminal good-guy stupidity.

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  17. I hope Croaker isn't a Houdini. Good tension, Aurora.

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  18. And leave him completely alone with a murderer who may or may not wake up at any time... I smell loads of trouble coming. I can't believe Toby or Estelle wouldn't want to see it through that he gets locked up, I would.

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    1. They will have a pigeon spying on the car!

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  19. Well, this turned out all right. I'm glad they are safe.

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  20. I really enjoyed the natural flow of the conversation .... and also waiting for a twist to come soon. I don't trust croaker and hope the girls are safe.

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  21. Oh goodness, belts mean something different in my world. Took me a second to read it correctly. :D

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  22. Toby seems happy about his task. Don't know if Croaker will be too much to handle, though.

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