Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences. Join the fun and read our snippets.
I’m continuing the scene from my latest release: Starrella Falls, Book 2 in the Secret Supers. You can read the first chapters HERE.
Background: The wanted murderer, Croaker, attacks Estelle and Toby knocks him out. Mark and Diane arrive in his car and Mark offers to take Croaker to the police station. I skipped the part where they searched him and removed a gun and poison darts.
You can read last weeks’ snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/08/wanted-for-murder-snippet-from.html
The final sentence was: Toby stepped aside and rubbed his hands together, “Better tie his hands.”
“Okay, give me the belt,” Mark pushed their prisoner onto his side, wrenched Croaker’s hands behind his back and wrapped the belt around his wrists.
When he had finished the job, Toby drawled, “Lock him in jail pronto. Don’t know how long he’ll be out and those belts ain’t strong.”
“Correct.” Mark tapped on his phone, “I’ll call Inspector Parkins. He’ll want to see our catch.” After speaking into the phone, he swiveled round to scan the parking lot. Diane and Estelle stood side by side, watching anxiously from a safe distance next to the motorcycle. Mark gestured to the girls and asked, “Will you see them home, Ryan?”
“My pleasure!” Toby grinned.
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I think Toby got the better job!ReplyDelete
I enjoy your dialogue, Aurora. It always flows, so easily.
They're certainly taking precautions. You can't be too careful.ReplyDelete
One is less and one is more careful than it appears.Delete
I wonder if Croaker has some tricks up his sleeve!ReplyDelete
Visual, punchy and has a great feel to it. Nice scene, Aurora.ReplyDelete
Glad they're not complacent about Croaker, and Toby's reaction was great.ReplyDelete
Someone is complacent!Delete
This Croaker character is scary, and I have a feeling all their precautions might not be enough!ReplyDelete
I have a few more twists to this scene.Delete
I agree with the other comments. Croaker is a baddie.ReplyDelete
You should read what he did to his accomplices!Delete
Looks like they're out of danger... for now. ;)ReplyDelete
I do not trust that belt. Nope. Not at all. Great snippet!ReplyDelete
No, someone is going too fast.Delete
Hmmm... How did it become "our" catch, Mark? You weren't there for it! And I still think something's not right in his actions; he's still too eager for everyone to be gone and leave him alone with Croaker.ReplyDelete
Oh, I do hope Mark gets Croaker to the station before he wakes. Toby definitely seems to have an easier task. Nice snippet!ReplyDelete
Toby's task will become more difficult.Delete
One can never be too careful, but I'm wondering if they were careful enough. Love the banter, too.ReplyDelete
It may take a while to find out at 8-10 sentences a week!Delete
The choreography in the first paragraph is very well done.ReplyDelete
Oh, interesting! I wonder if he's an accomplice or if he just wants to get the glory of the catch all by himself?ReplyDelete
Mark is in military intelligence.Delete
Somehow I don't think they've seen the last of Croaker... Nice snippet!ReplyDelete
I'd rather have Toby's job!ReplyDelete
We'll see how that works out!Delete
Definitely tense, well done.ReplyDelete
They're taking their job seriously, and that's greatly preferable to scenes where a baddie can escape because of terminal good-guy stupidity.ReplyDelete
Wait and see!Delete
I hope Croaker isn't a Houdini. Good tension, Aurora.ReplyDelete
He's a sneaky Zarnoth!Delete
And leave him completely alone with a murderer who may or may not wake up at any time... I smell loads of trouble coming. I can't believe Toby or Estelle wouldn't want to see it through that he gets locked up, I would.ReplyDelete
They will have a pigeon spying on the car!Delete
Well, this turned out all right. I'm glad they are safe.ReplyDelete
For the moment!Delete
I really enjoyed the natural flow of the conversation .... and also waiting for a twist to come soon. I don't trust croaker and hope the girls are safe.ReplyDelete
Oh goodness, belts mean something different in my world. Took me a second to read it correctly. :DReplyDelete
Croaker is a ruthless killer.Delete
Toby seems happy about his task. Don't know if Croaker will be too much to handle, though.ReplyDelete