Welcome to another Sunday
with Weekend Writing Warriors.
Writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences. Join
the fun and read our snippets.
I’m
continuing the scene from my latest release: Starrella Falls, Book 2 in the Secret Supers. You can read the
first chapters HERE.
Background: The wanted murderer, Croaker, attacks
Estelle and Toby knocks him out. Mark and Diane arrive in his car and Mark
offers to take Croaker to the police station. I skipped the part where they
searched him and removed a gun and poison darts.
You can
read last weeks’ snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/08/wanted-for-murder-snippet-from.html
The final sentence was: Toby stepped aside and rubbed his hands together, “Better tie his
hands.”
“Okay, give me the belt,” Mark
pushed their prisoner onto his side, wrenched Croaker’s hands behind his back
and wrapped the belt around his wrists.
When he had finished the job,
Toby drawled, “Lock him in jail pronto. Don’t know how long he’ll be out and those
belts ain’t strong.”
“Correct.” Mark tapped on his
phone, “I’ll call Inspector Parkins. He’ll want to see our catch.” After
speaking into the phone, he swiveled round to scan the parking lot. Diane and
Estelle stood side by side, watching anxiously from a safe distance next to the
motorcycle. Mark gestured to the girls and asked, “Will you see them home,
Ryan?”
“My pleasure!” Toby grinned.
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As always, I’ll be happy
to reply to your comments.
I think Toby got the better job!
ReplyDeleteI enjoy your dialogue, Aurora. It always flows, so easily.
Oh thanks!
DeleteThey're certainly taking precautions. You can't be too careful.
ReplyDeleteOne is less and one is more careful than it appears.
DeleteI wonder if Croaker has some tricks up his sleeve!
ReplyDeleteSneaky minds!
DeleteVisual, punchy and has a great feel to it. Nice scene, Aurora.
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteGlad they're not complacent about Croaker, and Toby's reaction was great.
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Someone is complacent!
DeleteThis Croaker character is scary, and I have a feeling all their precautions might not be enough!
ReplyDeleteI have a few more twists to this scene.
DeleteI agree with the other comments. Croaker is a baddie.
ReplyDeleteYou should read what he did to his accomplices!
DeleteLooks like they're out of danger... for now. ;)
ReplyDeleteI do not trust that belt. Nope. Not at all. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteNo, someone is going too fast.
DeleteHmmm... How did it become "our" catch, Mark? You weren't there for it! And I still think something's not right in his actions; he's still too eager for everyone to be gone and leave him alone with Croaker.
ReplyDeleteWell spotted!
DeleteOh, I do hope Mark gets Croaker to the station before he wakes. Toby definitely seems to have an easier task. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteToby's task will become more difficult.
DeleteOne can never be too careful, but I'm wondering if they were careful enough. Love the banter, too.
ReplyDeleteIt may take a while to find out at 8-10 sentences a week!
DeleteThe choreography in the first paragraph is very well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteOh, interesting! I wonder if he's an accomplice or if he just wants to get the glory of the catch all by himself?
ReplyDeleteMark is in military intelligence.
DeleteSomehow I don't think they've seen the last of Croaker... Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteGood guess.
DeleteI'd rather have Toby's job!
ReplyDeleteWe'll see how that works out!
DeleteDefinitely tense, well done.
ReplyDeleteThey're taking their job seriously, and that's greatly preferable to scenes where a baddie can escape because of terminal good-guy stupidity.
ReplyDeleteWait and see!
DeleteI hope Croaker isn't a Houdini. Good tension, Aurora.
ReplyDeleteHe's a sneaky Zarnoth!
DeleteAnd leave him completely alone with a murderer who may or may not wake up at any time... I smell loads of trouble coming. I can't believe Toby or Estelle wouldn't want to see it through that he gets locked up, I would.
ReplyDeleteThey will have a pigeon spying on the car!
DeleteWell, this turned out all right. I'm glad they are safe.
ReplyDeleteFor the moment!
DeleteI really enjoyed the natural flow of the conversation .... and also waiting for a twist to come soon. I don't trust croaker and hope the girls are safe.
ReplyDeleteOh goodness, belts mean something different in my world. Took me a second to read it correctly. :D
ReplyDeleteCroaker is a ruthless killer.
DeleteToby seems happy about his task. Don't know if Croaker will be too much to handle, though.
ReplyDeleteSure!
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