Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Here, writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences. Join the fun and read our snippets.
Today, I’m continuing the scene from my new release: Starrella Falls, Book 2 in the Secret Supers. You can read the first chapters HERE. I may be slow to read your snippets since I’ll be driving to a scientific conference on Sunday.
Background: Toby and Estelle are having dinner in their first real date for several weeks, when Estelle recognizes a man who walks into the pub. Toby says Croaker is dangerous so they leave by the rear exit.
A little background for this scene: At the beginning of the book, Toby’s fear that Estelle will be identified by their enemies leads to complications. But now, he has been recognized by Croaker.
You can read last weeks’ snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/07/act-cool-snippet-from-starrella-falls.html
The final sentence was: Croaker stood facing them.
When they stepped outside, Toby gestured for Estelle to wait where she would be concealed behind the door. “Let him spot me first.” He walked to his motorcycle and bent on one knee, pretending to examine the front tire.
The man came out and focused on Toby. His face twisted in an evil smirk and he raised his hand. A needle point glinted. Estelle blazed at his fingers.
He dropped the dart, cried a Zarnoth curse and lunged at Estelle.
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Well, she avoided one jam, but now it looks like she's gotten herself into another. Nice snippet!ReplyDelete
This chapter has a lot of action.Delete
She didn't stay hidden and hopefully now Toby will be able to save her.ReplyDelete
Yes, they're working together.Delete
I think they make a good team, enjoyed the description of the action! Great snippet...ReplyDelete
Thanks. They are working well together by now.Delete
She's not one for following directions, huh? Gotta love a girl like that! :-)ReplyDelete
He didn't tell her not to fire.Delete
Hope Toby's a fast thinker, because things have just changed quickly!ReplyDelete
There are many changes coming.Delete
So she's just looked out for Toby, and now he'll look out for her... right?ReplyDelete
This was a fun snippet to read. Great job!ReplyDelete
Surprise ending. Well done.ReplyDelete
You get minor cliffhangers whenever I can.Delete
Hopefully that wasn't too early an ambush and they can handle this. I think she should have waited until he was a little closer to Toby and gotten him from behind completely, then he couldn't have lunged for her if there was enough distance.ReplyDelete
She couldn't let him shoot Toby.Delete
Wonderful imagery. I'm thinking she doesn't follow instructions well. lolReplyDelete
She did what he said. He knows her superpower works at a distance while he does not.Delete
Out of the frying pan into the fire. Nice excerpt.ReplyDelete
Yes, this scene has a good sequence for the snippets.Delete
Uh oh. I think she just outed herself.ReplyDelete
So did Croaker.Delete
He knows where she is...I hope there's a way out of this jam!ReplyDelete
Of course - my stories end happily.Delete
Great diversion and counter attack. Well done!ReplyDelete
And more to come!Delete
I'm beginning to doubt Croaker's intellect. I'm not sure I'd lunge at someone who is shooting flames at me.ReplyDelete
He does keep trying to kill people.ReplyDelete
I hope they don't get her! Great snippet!ReplyDelete
Well, a superheroine lives dangerously!Delete
One who doesn't follow instructions ... And although i'm sure she'll have everything under control I have a feeling he'll come to help.ReplyDelete
Croaker is sneaky - lots of twists in this section of the book.Delete
She wasn't hidden too long. That can't be good.ReplyDelete
She couldn't risk his darts hitting Toby.Delete
Enjoyed this snippet so much. Looking forward to next weeks.ReplyDelete
It's coming soon!Delete