Welcome to another Sunday
with Weekend Writing Warriors.
Here, writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences.
Join the fun and read our snippets.
Today,
I’m continuing the scene from my new release: Starrella Falls, Book 2 in the Secret Supers. You can read the
first chapters HERE. I may be slow to read
your snippets since I’ll be driving to a scientific conference on Sunday.
Background: Toby and Estelle are having dinner in
their first real date for several weeks, when Estelle recognizes a man who
walks into the pub. Toby says Croaker is dangerous so they leave by the rear
exit.
A little
background for this scene: At the beginning of the book, Toby’s fear that
Estelle will be identified by their enemies leads to complications. But now, he
has been recognized by Croaker.
You can
read last weeks’ snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/07/act-cool-snippet-from-starrella-falls.html
The final sentence was: Croaker stood facing them.
When they stepped outside, Toby
gestured for Estelle to wait where she would be concealed behind the door. “Let
him spot me first.” He walked to his motorcycle and bent on one knee,
pretending to examine the front tire.
The man came out and focused on
Toby. His face twisted in an evil smirk and he raised his hand. A needle point
glinted. Estelle blazed at his fingers.
He dropped the dart, cried a
Zarnoth curse and lunged at Estelle.
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Well, she avoided one jam, but now it looks like she's gotten herself into another. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteThis chapter has a lot of action.
DeleteShe didn't stay hidden and hopefully now Toby will be able to save her.
ReplyDeleteYes, they're working together.
DeleteI think they make a good team, enjoyed the description of the action! Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks. They are working well together by now.
DeleteShe's not one for following directions, huh? Gotta love a girl like that! :-)
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
He didn't tell her not to fire.
DeleteHope Toby's a fast thinker, because things have just changed quickly!
ReplyDeleteThere are many changes coming.
DeleteSo she's just looked out for Toby, and now he'll look out for her... right?
ReplyDeleteThis was a fun snippet to read. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteSurprise ending. Well done.
ReplyDeleteYou get minor cliffhangers whenever I can.
DeleteHopefully that wasn't too early an ambush and they can handle this. I think she should have waited until he was a little closer to Toby and gotten him from behind completely, then he couldn't have lunged for her if there was enough distance.
ReplyDeleteShe couldn't let him shoot Toby.
DeleteWonderful imagery. I'm thinking she doesn't follow instructions well. lol
ReplyDeleteShe did what he said. He knows her superpower works at a distance while he does not.
DeleteOut of the frying pan into the fire. Nice excerpt.
ReplyDeleteYes, this scene has a good sequence for the snippets.
DeleteUh oh. I think she just outed herself.
ReplyDeleteSo did Croaker.
DeleteHe knows where she is...I hope there's a way out of this jam!
ReplyDeleteOf course - my stories end happily.
DeleteGreat diversion and counter attack. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAnd more to come!
DeleteI'm beginning to doubt Croaker's intellect. I'm not sure I'd lunge at someone who is shooting flames at me.
ReplyDeleteHe does keep trying to kill people.
ReplyDeleteI hope they don't get her! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteWell, a superheroine lives dangerously!
DeleteOne who doesn't follow instructions ... And although i'm sure she'll have everything under control I have a feeling he'll come to help.
ReplyDeleteCroaker is sneaky - lots of twists in this section of the book.
DeleteShe wasn't hidden too long. That can't be good.
ReplyDeleteShe couldn't risk his darts hitting Toby.
DeleteEnjoyed this snippet so much. Looking forward to next weeks.
ReplyDeleteIt's coming soon!
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