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In celebration of the
Chinese Year of the Monkey, I’m giving you an excerpt with an alien monkey from
Grand Master’s Game (punctuated
to fit). In this scene, Violet and
Athanor have come to the Council Hall with a message in the first move of his
game to oust the villains.
The Secretary was a Jangalorian, a small fur covered animal like
a cross between a rabbit and a monkey. She leaped on top of the desk and
crouched on all six legs; her white puff of a tail quivered, and she shrilled,
“You cannot enter without an appointment!”
Athanor scowled at her. After one glance at his fierce hawk face
and glaring laser eyes, the Secretary curled into a trembling ball.
Violet decided to mediate; she projected reassurance to the
cowering Secretary. Then, she attempted to mollify her irate Grand Master, “The Secretary’s only doing her job; she’ll cooperate faster if you speak in a
friendlier manner.”
He crossed his arms over his chest and muttered, “You speak to
her, my conciliatory pawn.”
Squaring her chin firmly, Violet said, “My Grand Master brings
an urgent message for the Council.”
The furry Secretary unrolled and jumped onto her six legs; her
tail twitched and she stuttered, “Urgent message from Grand Master Griffin.
Give scroll for Berthal to submit to Lord of Lightning, Council Chair.”
The discovery of the
alien monkeys on Jangalore predates the events of the Grand Master’s Trilogy by
some three hundred years. You can read about the first contact in my FREE short story:
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As always, your comments
are welcome. Please return to www.wewriwa.com to sample the works of the other writers.
Sounds like the Grand Master can truly learn from his little pawn.
ReplyDeleteThey learn from each other, but he has further to go.
DeleteI love your creatures, Aurora!
ReplyDeleteI had fun imagining them.
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ReplyDeleteThe dynamic between Violet and Athanor just pops! All your excerpts read like you had fun writing the whole story, and that's cool. I think writing from people who love what they're doing has a certain zing that really attracts readers. :-)
ReplyDeleteThis trilogy was fun to write, also hard work to keep track of the different aliens and planets.
DeleteInteresting creature. Reminds me a little bit of the flying monkeys in the Wizard of Oz.
ReplyDeleteIt's great if you can visualize her.
DeleteGood thing Violet was there to act as a mediator!
ReplyDeleteYes, she mediates several times when he goes into Grand Master mode.
DeleteI love how Violet keeps her cool and gets things done! Marvelous description of the secretary, too.
ReplyDeleteYes, he is used to being obeyed instantly, except Violet didn't always.
DeleteThe poor Secretary! Loved this whole scene, great snippet :)
ReplyDeleteYes - fun and illustrates the characters.
DeleteI'm not sure I'd be too happy to help a man out after he called me a "conciliatory pawn." She's got a cool head on her shoulders!
ReplyDeleteHe calls her a lot of things, although never really derogatory - my little pawn, clever pawn.
DeleteLove the description. Such an imaginative creature and great characters. Look forward to getting another glimpse into the world you have created.
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteYou can read the free short story, or wait and see what I have next week!
Delightfully original, Aurora. I like the Jangalorian. :-)
ReplyDeleteYes, they are cute.
DeleteYup, I can see Athanor putting the fear of God into that poor secretary. Luckily Violet is there to keep the peace!
ReplyDeleteHe does learn eventually to rein in his bark.
DeleteYou seriously have some amazingly imaginative creatures/aliens! You should have collector cards created of them. How fun would THAT be? Fun snippet!
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