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I’m posting snippets from Rishalt, Book 2 of Taxyon Space. The
story begins on the submarine Galileo Station on Jupiter’s moon, Europa,
shortly after the end of Book 1.
Rishalt, Book 2 of Taxyon
Space
Draft Blurb
Kiron Arqin Ramis is
summoned home by his family to the unwanted honor of a new triad and union with
a high-ranked female. Unable to forget Nikki, he endures a perilous exile on a
wilderness planet instead of complying with his family’s demands. But, the
Triarchs have other plans for him.
Stakes are higher than
the lives of two individuals. Earth leaders are desperate to acquire the
aliens’ interstellar technology, while Warrish dispute the benefit of an
alliance with inferiors. Can Nikki and Kiron pierce the barriers separating
them to find happiness with provoking an unequal war?
The aliens’ strange sphere appeared in the
ocean outside the submarine station. Nikki and two colleagues entered and spoke
to the Warrish.
You
can read last week’s snippet here –
The final line was: None
had red hair; Kiron was missing.
Due to the concern voiced about Kiron, I’m
skipping the rest of the chapter where the aliens hand over a message cylinder
for the leaders of Earthers. Chapter 2 gives Kiron’s perspective.
Kiron stepped out of the Qtrans into the atrium of the major
spaceport on Rishalt. Planetary gravity hit him like a physical blow. Inhaling
the humid, oxygen-rich atmosphere, he gave thanks for the ameliorating effect
of grav-ease.
Orderly lines of people waited for the next ship, fresh troops
bound for the battlefield, excited youngsters on an educational trip, and sober
merchants. The crowd filled him with unease, eliciting spikes of alarm along
his tense nerves. He had not been in a room with more than a dozen people
during his four years as a Watcher. Before he had taken three paces toward the
exit, a stout official accosted him.
Bowing with the exact degree of respect due to a younger son, he
said, “Brin Arqin Ramis, let me be the first to offer a welcome to your home.
Permit me to guide you to the greeting chamber where your esteemed family
awaits your presence.”
Rishalt is available for pre-order
Two alien worlds. Two lovers torn apart. Twist
the hyperthreads into unity.
As always, I’ll be happy to reply to your comments.
The poor man seems uncomfortable. I hope things get better for him soon. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteNot better as far as he is concerned.
DeleteKiron doesn't seem like he's adjusting well. Though I think dealing with a change in gravity would hit anyone hard. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteThe aliens have a special drink to ease the effect of high gravity. And, he's not happy. He didn't want to leave Europa, but he cannot refuse his parents' summons.
DeleteNice description of the scene without too much detail before the next action happens. I can easily imagine he'd be feeling overwhelmed roight now!
ReplyDeleteYes, and of course, it's going to get worse once he hears from his parents.
DeleteCool, felt like I was there!
ReplyDeleteAnd he wishes he wasn't! lol
DeleteI could sense his unease. Great imagery.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteOfficious people give me the heebie jeebies too. Great snippet, Aurora.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteHome sweet home? I'm thinking not. Nice descriptions, Aurora.
ReplyDeleteHe's not in tune with the culture.
DeleteYou revealed more than I expected. Good job.
ReplyDeleteWhat did you expect?
DeleteThis is excellent! I felt like I was there in that spaceport.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteGreat descriptive scene, I could really empathise with his unease.
ReplyDeleteGood - I'm glad it give the right impression.
DeleteThe guy who met him sounds like a jerk. I wonder if his family will be the same.
ReplyDeleteNot in the same way!
DeleteIt's easy to see how having spent so much time with just a few people around would make him uneasy in crowds. It'd be surprising if he weren't.
ReplyDeleteYes and of course, he doesn't want to be there.
DeleteI love world-building and you're doing a marvelous job. Nice snippet.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I agree - it's fun to create new worlds.
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