Saturday, November 21, 2020

A Harmless Old Man - snippet for #WeWRiWa


Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors.

Enjoy a little distraction from pandemic worries. Meet writers in various genres and read 8-10 sentence snippets of their stories. Find a new author and sample their work.

I’m continuing with snippets from the first chapter of a new fantasy story about a witch and an elf. The main character, Bridget Bramble, lives in a small cottage on the outskirts of a village. Her plans to go on a foraging expedition in the woods were interrupted when a troop of armed men marched into the village.

You can read last week’s snippet here:

Please note, the text is unedited and subject to change.

Elder Grantham stomped onto the road to confront the troop of strangers. Old Grantham called himself the village chief and fancied he ran the place. He raised his hand and asked a question, his words inaudible at this distance.

The men’s leader barked an order.

A man in the front rank punched his fist into Grantham’s face.

The grey-haired old man crumpled, his body thumping onto the road.

Aghast, Bridget gulped. Grantham might be a pompous ass, but what cruel kind of person would mistreat the harmless old man?

A woman screeched inside the adjacent cottage. 


And a few more lines:


The intruders, clearly enemies, split into two groups. The first group rushed into the nearest cottages and dragged the occupants onto the road. A second set of men entered the houses and carried out boxes of valuables.

Villagers yelled in anger, or screamed and begged for mercy. The raiders beat off the scant opposition and herded the others into a field. 


Draft Blurb

In a land troubled by invasions from the east, Bridget Bramble lives in a small village where she barters herbs and carved buttons. When marauders target her village and murder her family, she flees into the woods. Armed with her Granny’s advice, and a bag of magic buttons, she sets out on the perilous journey to Oakenwald, the fabled land where elves and men live in harmony. As she travels farther from home, she encounters malicious creatures from the worst kind of folktales.

Lost in the foothills of the mountains, Bridget meets an elf, Windswift the Wanderer. He offers to guide her across the mountain range. But what is he doing in human territory? Can an ordinary, or almost ordinary, human girl trust a cold hearted elf? 


Any comments or suggestions are welcome.


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  1. This combined with the blurb lead me to believe the next few scenes are going to be rather heartbreaking. Great snippet.

    1. Your deduction is correct. Should I skip the worst ones?

  2. This is an absolutely horrible thing to happen. From the blurb, it sounds like things are going to get worse.

  3. Oh no, I hope the old man's okay.

  4. You've plunged us right into the midst of the precipitating incident -- and this incident is horrible enough to easily drive your book.

  5. Well, that's a rather gruesome beginning, but the optimist in me believes hope is on the way! :) Great snippet!

  6. I think we can see where this is going and it won't be pretty. I hope she takes some steps QUICK to protect herself. Dramatic snippet.

  7. Oh God, nothing good is going to happen in that field. This is frightening, but I would not be able to stop reading if there was more of it there.

  8. Yes, it's easy to see where this is heading, unfortunately. I'm so sorry she's going to witness this, but glad she survives. Great snippet!

  9. I was afraid something like this would happen when they showed up.

  10. This is a frightening! Being dragged away doesn't bode well, I would think.

    1. Not at all. Maybe I shouldn't show the next scene close to Thanksgiving (US).

  11. What a horrible turn of events for her village. I hope at least some of the people survive.