Saturday, May 14, 2016

Estelle bumps into Toby - Snippet from Super Starrella for #WeWriWa #SciFi & #Romance

Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Here, writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences. Join the fun and read our snippets.
Happy Mother’s Day!
You remember Toby – the tough gangster with the tattoo of a black cat leaping up his biceps. Estelle met him over the summer and heard his voice when she was pinned in a weird cylinder in the Veterinary Clinic. Well, now she’s seen him at her university. Read last week’s snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/05/students-at-goldman-university-snippet.html
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Diane had her eyes glommed onto Toby and Estelle guessed he would spot her striking red hair. Oh well, Estelle was used to being overshadowed by her glamorous friend.
When he was ten feet away, Toby slowed; his dark gaze fixed on Estelle and his sullen mouth quirked into a lop-sided grin. He drawled, “Estelle; good to see you, babe. Thought I’d bump into you on campus sometime.”
Estelle said, “Hi Toby! Didn’t expect to see you here.” She flushed bright pink, recalling when she had last heard his distinctive voice at the weird Veterinary Clinic. Had he seen her lying naked in that transparent cylinder? His smile broadened as if he guessed her thoughts.


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Blurb
Teen superhero, Starrella, and her flying horse tackle villains in the skies of Atalanta.
The quiet summer before her freshman year turns frighteningly weird after Estelle Wright trespasses onto an Army base. Blown into the air and knocked unconscious, she wakes with a nascent superpower. Not to mention a winged horse with a snarky attitude and a mind of her own.
Back home in Atalanta, a serial killer is targeting the students at Goldman University. Before long she must juggle college classes with sneaking out of the house after dark to battle alien monsters. Estelle’s life is in danger, but who can she trust: handsome Captain Copper from military intelligence, or hunky Toby, the tough gangster with a motorbike? Both men have secret agendas, but falling in love is not in their plans.
Young adult superheroes, quirky animal sidekicks, and a dash of romance enliven this thrilling adventure. Book 1 of the Secret Supers.


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44 comments:

  1. I love that Toby surprised her in his greeting and could almost read her mind. Great snippet! :)

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    1. Thanks! She is surprised and suspicious to see the "bad boy biker" at her university.

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  2. I still think he's there watching over her until she realizes her own power. :-) Good description, Aurora. :-)

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    1. He is not watching very closely. She has already used her power to stop a killer.

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  3. I'm glad she got recognized first!

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    1. Of course. He's used to girls admiring him.

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  4. I think I'd be blushing more than bright pink! Fun snippet. (I both love -- and feel bad -- that she's used to being overshadowed by her friend.)

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  5. Hmmm. Maybe she is more interesting than she realises.
    Especially since Toby is calling her "babe".

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    1. She is interesting to him in more than one way. Yes, she is pretty and also smart and spunky. Estelle doesn't swoon over him.

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  6. i like the last paragraph ... well written.

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  7. Love his greeting- and her thoughts around the awkwardness of the last time she saw him.

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    1. She didn't see him in the Clinic, only heard his distinctive drawl.

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  8. Don't blame Diane--redheads can't help drawing attention! ;-) I love how Estelle plays it cool with him. Loving these snippets.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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    1. Playing cool, or unexpected, is what gets him interested.

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  9. Guess Tony's interest is in Estelle. She makes him smile. Good sign. :)

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    1. Perhaps he is remembering her naked body! Lol

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  10. LOL! These excerpts are such fun! I think Estelle and Toby are going to be good friends.

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  11. Nice that Toby talks to her first...I think, depending on where he falls on the hero spectrum. Enjoyed the excerpt, really captures the late teenage viewpoint!

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    1. Yes. He has a personal interest in a budding superheroine.

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  12. Ooh, very awkward greeting. Sounds like he's seen or knows rather more than she would be comfortable with.

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  13. Sounds like she needs to practice conscious communication inside her head. Great snippet, Aurora. :)

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    1. Not with him. She can communicate mentally with her horse.

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  14. Love his greeting. He's so smooth.

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    1. Yeah! Totally cool - gang leader with a motorbike and what is he doing at the university?

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  15. I'm glad he spoke first. I'm loving your heroine.

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  16. Despite the striking red hair, Toby speaks to Estelle without any seeming acknowledgement of Diane. Nice.

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  17. He spoke to her first. Sounds like he likes her more than she realized.

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  18. Oh my and he is calling her babe. I'm sure he did saw her naked. I would totally be blushing so red if that happened to me.

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  19. This will be an interesting conversation... ;)

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  20. I guess that was a 'yes' to seeing her. lol

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    1. In a way, although he doesn't know she heard his voice at the Clinic. I'd guess he likes to see her blushing.

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  21. I'm guessing he did she her naked then. Saucy.

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  22. Oh I know the feeling of being overshadowed but I love that he sees Estelle instead of the friend first.

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