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Happy Mother’s Day!
You remember Toby – the
tough gangster with the tattoo of a black cat leaping up his biceps. Estelle met
him over the summer and heard his voice when she was pinned in a weird cylinder
in the Veterinary Clinic. Well, now she’s seen him at her university. Read last
week’s snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/05/students-at-goldman-university-snippet.html
(Some
creative punctuation to fit.)
Diane had her eyes glommed onto
Toby and Estelle guessed he would spot her striking red hair. Oh well, Estelle
was used to being overshadowed by her glamorous friend.
When he was ten feet away, Toby
slowed; his dark gaze fixed on Estelle and his sullen mouth quirked into a
lop-sided grin. He drawled, “Estelle; good to see you, babe. Thought I’d bump
into you on campus sometime.”
Estelle said, “Hi Toby! Didn’t
expect to see you here.” She flushed bright pink, recalling when she had last
heard his distinctive voice at the weird Veterinary Clinic. Had he seen her
lying naked in that transparent cylinder? His smile broadened as if he guessed
her thoughts.
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Blurb
Teen
superhero, Starrella, and her flying horse tackle villains in the skies of
Atalanta.
The
quiet summer before her freshman year turns frighteningly weird after Estelle
Wright trespasses onto an Army base. Blown into the air and knocked
unconscious, she wakes with a nascent superpower. Not to mention a winged horse
with a snarky attitude and a mind of her own.
Back
home in Atalanta, a serial killer is targeting the students at Goldman
University. Before long she must juggle college classes with sneaking out of
the house after dark to battle alien monsters. Estelle’s life is in danger, but
who can she trust: handsome Captain Copper from military intelligence, or hunky
Toby, the tough gangster with a motorbike? Both men have secret agendas, but
falling in love is not in their plans.
Young
adult superheroes, quirky animal sidekicks, and a dash of romance enliven this thrilling
adventure. Book 1 of the Secret Supers.
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I love that Toby surprised her in his greeting and could almost read her mind. Great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks! She is surprised and suspicious to see the "bad boy biker" at her university.
DeleteI still think he's there watching over her until she realizes her own power. :-) Good description, Aurora. :-)
ReplyDeleteHe is not watching very closely. She has already used her power to stop a killer.
DeleteI'm glad she got recognized first!
ReplyDeleteOf course. He's used to girls admiring him.
DeleteI think I'd be blushing more than bright pink! Fun snippet. (I both love -- and feel bad -- that she's used to being overshadowed by her friend.)
ReplyDeleteDiane is a fun friend overall.
DeleteHmmm. Maybe she is more interesting than she realises.
ReplyDeleteEspecially since Toby is calling her "babe".
She is interesting to him in more than one way. Yes, she is pretty and also smart and spunky. Estelle doesn't swoon over him.
Deletei like the last paragraph ... well written.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteLove his greeting- and her thoughts around the awkwardness of the last time she saw him.
ReplyDeleteShe didn't see him in the Clinic, only heard his distinctive drawl.
DeleteDon't blame Diane--redheads can't help drawing attention! ;-) I love how Estelle plays it cool with him. Loving these snippets.
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Playing cool, or unexpected, is what gets him interested.
DeleteGuess Tony's interest is in Estelle. She makes him smile. Good sign. :)
ReplyDeletePerhaps he is remembering her naked body! Lol
DeleteLOL! These excerpts are such fun! I think Estelle and Toby are going to be good friends.
ReplyDeleteYes and no.
DeleteNice that Toby talks to her first...I think, depending on where he falls on the hero spectrum. Enjoyed the excerpt, really captures the late teenage viewpoint!
ReplyDeleteYes. He has a personal interest in a budding superheroine.
DeleteOoh, very awkward greeting. Sounds like he's seen or knows rather more than she would be comfortable with.
ReplyDeleteHer guess is correct.
DeleteSounds like she needs to practice conscious communication inside her head. Great snippet, Aurora. :)
ReplyDeleteNot with him. She can communicate mentally with her horse.
DeleteLove his greeting. He's so smooth.
ReplyDeleteYeah! Totally cool - gang leader with a motorbike and what is he doing at the university?
DeleteI'm glad he spoke first. I'm loving your heroine.
ReplyDeleteDespite the striking red hair, Toby speaks to Estelle without any seeming acknowledgement of Diane. Nice.
ReplyDeleteHe has a special interest in Estelle.
DeleteHe spoke to her first. Sounds like he likes her more than she realized.
ReplyDeleteShe is right to be suspicious of him.
DeleteOh my and he is calling her babe. I'm sure he did saw her naked. I would totally be blushing so red if that happened to me.
ReplyDeleteThis will be an interesting conversation... ;)
ReplyDeleteBut short.
DeleteI guess that was a 'yes' to seeing her. lol
ReplyDeleteIn a way, although he doesn't know she heard his voice at the Clinic. I'd guess he likes to see her blushing.
DeleteI'm guessing he did she her naked then. Saucy.
ReplyDeleteOh yes. I have fun with them.
DeleteOh I know the feeling of being overshadowed but I love that he sees Estelle instead of the friend first.
ReplyDeleteYes, Estelle is happy about it!
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