Saturday, May 28, 2016

Mom would have fits! Snippet from Super Starrella for #WeWriWa

Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Here, writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences. Join the fun and read our snippets.
Remember Toby – the tough gangster with the tattoo of a black cat leaping up his biceps? Estelle met him over the summer and heard his voice when she was pinned in a weird cylinder in the Veterinary Clinic. Estelle learns new aspects of Toby each time they meet.
Today, I’m continuing the scene where Estelle and her friend Diane bump into Toby at university. Read last week’s snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/05/brainy-toby-snippet-from-super.html
Some of you took a dislike to Diane, yet she often has good advice, as in this snippet after Toby swaggers away to his class.
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“I can tell he likes you,” Diane said, “men usually stare at me.”
“And ignore me; yes, I’ve seen them glued to your face,” Estelle teased, knowing she could never compete with Diane’s looks. It had been the same when they were at high school. All the guys gathered around Diane, and worse, sometimes they chatted to Estelle only because they wanted to be introduced to her beautiful friend. She hoped Toby was different, although she was suspicious about his presence at the sinister Clinic.
“Ask him to have lunch with you,” Diane urged, “or drive you home.”
“I couldn’t ask him to my house. Mom would have fits if she saw his tattoos,” Estelle said, nudging her friend.
Diane snickered, “Yeah. I can just imagine her frown of disapproval.” Soon they were both holding on to each other and giggling, just as if no serial killer was prowling the city streets. 

I’m rolling out a shiny new cover: 


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Blurb
Teen superhero, Starrella, and her flying horse tackle villains in the skies of Atalanta.
The quiet summer before her freshman year turns frighteningly weird after Estelle Wright trespasses onto an Army base. Blown into the air and knocked unconscious, she wakes with a nascent superpower. Not to mention a winged horse with a snarky attitude and a mind of her own.
Back home in Atalanta, a serial killer is targeting the students at Goldman University. Before long she must juggle college classes with sneaking out of the house after dark to battle alien monsters. Estelle’s life is in danger, but who can she trust: handsome Captain Copper from military intelligence, or hunky Toby, the tough gangster with a motorbike? Both men have secret agendas, but falling in love is not in their plans.
Young adult superheroes, quirky animal sidekicks, and a dash of romance enliven this thrilling adventure. Book 1 of the Secret Supers. 

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As always, your comments are welcome. Please return to www.wewriwa.com to sample the works of the other writers. 

34 comments:

  1. I love the last comparison. "As if no serial killer was profiling the city", I don't think I ever though about having a serial killer around.

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    1. The story starts with a weird crime scene. Definitely need the Secret Supers.

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  2. It's always good to have a friend back you up with the guys. Good snippet, Aurora, and nice cover.

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    1. Yes. Diane supports Estelle when she has guy problems.

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  3. A serial killer? Now, that adds a new twist to this story. Great snippet and new cover! :)

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    1. First chapter is the murder scene. Then, Estelle meets the hunky biker Toby and Captain Copper before she is flung into the mysterious Clinic.
      Thanks - I lke this cover!

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  4. Ha! Love the bit about her mom!

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    1. Her Mom's nagging is one of the conflicts in the story.

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  5. Love your Super Starrella cover, Aurora!
    The interaction between the two girls is sweet, and shows much more substance in both of their characters. Nicely done!

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  6. I like the combination of the contemporary realism between the girls and the other fantastical elements in the story. Love the cover too!

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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    1. Thanks!
      That was the idea behind this story, and hopefully series, gritty realism interspersed with fantastic, even comic book elements.

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  7. Great dialogue! I hope she pursues Toby. Though I suspect he'll give her a fair amount of grief before long. ;)

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  8. They seem to be good friends, which is always nice to have. Enjoyed the excerpt!

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    1. Yes. Diane keeps her grounded and always has a plan for entertainment, especially when Toby is elusive.

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  9. Wow, love the new twist of the serial killer in town...

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    1. Well, the murder victim is found at the start of the book. These snippets are from a later chapter and Estelle in her super identity has already encountered the killer.

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  10. Their eyes are glued to her FACE? Well, maybe part of the time, but I'm skeptical about young males.

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    1. Okay I take your point! Of course Diane and Estelle's eyes weren't glued on Toby's face either.

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  11. Oh yes, I was the Estelle to my best friend's Diane. It's not so bad, if your friend is considerate of your feelings, which it seems Diane is.

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  12. I like the cover, and that last line is great.

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  13. I love how this is constructed, with the everyday foibles of teen life playing out and the reminder of the seriousness of the situation brought in at the end.

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    1. This story has gritty realism counterposed with the fantastical - a flying horse, superpowers, and a comic book villain (Mr. Sunshine).

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  14. very real sounding dialouge between teens. Well done. Great snippet.

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  15. No surprise Diane knows her stuff in this department with her looks, but I like that she's not jealous he looked straight to Estelle instead. She's a good friend then. That last line is also awesome, what a interesting and different comparison. A bit chilling and foreboding also.

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    1. Thanks! Estelle will encounter the killers several times.

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  16. “I couldn’t ask him to my house. Mom would have fits if she saw his tattoos,”<<< Loved this line. My mom back in the day would of flipped too. she didn't want me to get tattoos, so now i have 8 lol. Great snippet can't wait to read more.

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    1. She doesn't see his tats until book 2! Too late for fits.

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