Welcome to another Sunday
with Weekend Writing Warriors.
Writers in different genres showcase their stories with 8-10 sentences. Join
the fun and read our snippets.
I’m
continuing the scene from: Starrella
Falls, Book 2 in the Secret Supers, until the end of this chapter. Then,
I’ll begin to post snippets from Book 3. You can read the first chapters of
Starrella Falls HERE.
Background: Estelle and Toby are superheroes and
their telepathic animal partners are Rockette, the flying mare, and Growler,
the jaguar.
Toby
knocks out the wanted murderer, Croaker, and Mark Copper offers to take Croaker
to the police station. Instead, Estelle and Toby discover Mark is driving
north, probably to Dupree Air Base.
You
can read last weeks’ snippet here: http://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2016/09/going-after-croaker-snippet-from.html
The last
line, spoken by Toby, was: “I’m going after
Copper.”
With
apologies for creative punctuation to fit the sentence limit.
Flinging her arms around him,
Estelle cried, “Don’t take any chances, Toby! Take me with you; I don’t want to
lose you.”
“Don’t fuss; I’ll be on guard.
Bigger headache too; have to chat with my pal, Joth. Can’t have the army
discovering Croaker’s an alien; would start an uproar. Reckon it ain’t good for
Farleons or Zarnoths.”
Pulling out his phone, Toby
drawled, “Goin’ to call him now.” Touching the screen, he grunted a greeting.
After a pause while he listened, he spoke rapidly in a strange language. Farli,
Estelle presumed, since she did not understand a word.
Now, Estelle has good reason to be worried.
Only a week earlier, she rescued Toby after he was captured by Croaker’s
henchmen. You try rescuing a hunky guy who can’t walk!
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As always, I’ll be happy
to reply to your comments.
They have a lot to deal with!
ReplyDeleteBTW, your link on the Wewriwa page is broken. I got here by clicking on your home page.
Thanks for finding the post and telling me about the problem.
DeleteI'm still worried about him. Looking forward to the next snippet!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Of course. Croaker is big trouble, but there is a happy ending. Sort of.
DeleteHe sees confident, but I'm with Estelle on this one.
ReplyDeleteI agree. Overconfidence can get him into trouble.
DeleteDon't fuss. I'll be on guard - yea - yea - yea. He's about to get into trouble and she's going to have to get him out - which makes for a great story :-) Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThanks! Although, it doesn't turn out quite like you're imagining.
DeleteHe's very confident but she's worried and she's known him a long time. He's probably going to get in trouble. :D
ReplyDeleteShe had to rescue him before. But, she has learned about him and his strange secret life gradually over the past months.
DeleteA fast-paced snippet here! I'm confident he's doing the right thing :D
ReplyDeleteEstelle isn't!
DeleteI agree he should take her with him.
ReplyDelete(And, yes, the army discovering that Croaker's an alien would not be a good thing. I still don't trust that that's where Mark is taking him, though.)
It's Toby's guess.
DeleteI think Estelle is right to be worried. What trouble is Toby going to get into next?
ReplyDeleteMaybe not as much as the trouble she rescued him from.
DeleteI like his distinctive speech patterns.
ReplyDeleteIt's part of his cover and fits with the hot biker/gangster image.
DeleteHe seems quite sure of himself, but I'd go with him just to be safe.
ReplyDeleteI agree.
DeleteHe's too overconfident--which is probably why he needs a babysitter! LOL! She better keep an eye on him.
ReplyDeleteYou've got the idea.
DeleteThere's a lot going on here. I hope no one discovers he's an alien.
ReplyDeleteOf course, Toby's an alien too and genetically engineered to look human.
DeleteSo much in one snippet. Really liking the characters.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteI like a lot of action in my stories.
She might be right to be worried. The banter seems realistic and her concern rings through.
ReplyDeleteThe story sure does keep moving, never a moment to rest for them. but that's good for the reader! Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks! They had a bit of respite a week earlier.
DeleteLots going on ... i've got to catch up on the previous snippets to be up-to-date :-)
ReplyDeleteOK. I've nearly finished this segment.
DeleteI think he better play on the safe side and let her come along. Rockette is still following, right? She can make an excuse to come.
ReplyDeleteYou'll find out in the next snippet!
DeleteI think Toby is a bit too reckless.
ReplyDeleteSometimes, but read next week's snippet.
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