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Sunday. Sample the work of a
new author. Read snippets of stories in different genres.
Here’s the next excerpt
from Karrik, Book 6 of my SciFi series, Taxyon
Space. I am on
a second round of edits and hope to set up pre-orders soon.
Background:
Karrik lost an arm and a leg in battle and he struggles to speak. He lives in a
hospice on his homeworld of Rishalt. His two brothers are on Earth. In the last
two excerpts, his oldest brother called (very long distance). Karrik managed to
say, “Hello”, but he cannot say anything else. His brother ends the
conversation, clearly disappointed.
You can read last week’s excerpt at https://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2023/01/flummoxed-excerpt-from-karrik-for.html
He twisted onto his side, his intact hand flailing against the knotted
edge of the swaying hammock. He wailed, a forlorn cry, bemoaning his losses.
“Hush.” The sister brushed his shoulder, “You are safe.”
Soothed by her gentle touch, he quieted.
She asked, “Would you like to go into the garden.”
He forced the sounds through his lips, “Uh…Uh…ish.”
“Urish,” she completed the word for him. “Good.” She pulled the
blanket off his body, eased him into a sitting position, and wrapped him in a
white robe.
Ten
sentences and a few more
A second sister appeared, padding softly in her bare feet and guiding
a hovercart.
The two sisters worked together to lift him out of the hammock
and into the cart.
Helpless to prevent this humiliation, he moaned and wriggled.
“Hush, Karrik,” a sister said. “Why are you fussing? You like
the garden.”
Burning with shame, he sobbed. They didn’t understand. He wanted to walk instead of being bundled into a cart like a dead fish.
This except ends the first chapter. In the next chapter, we switch to his brother Alarik.
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You've done a wonderful job of bring his emotions to the reader. I could feel his shame and sorrow.
ReplyDeleteAurora, your art is amazing!! I had no idea you were an artist (of images and scenes) too. Wow...
Hi Teresa. I've always liked creating art. For about the last 6 months, I've been using AI text to image for character sketches, scenes, and 'pretty' pictures.
DeleteHis pride! You showed that very nicely that he's struggling with his pride.
ReplyDeleteYes. His nurses may be gentle, but they don't realize his mind has revived.
DeleteI can understand his pain and embarrassment. The man has little pride left.
ReplyDeleteHe's miserable. But his oldest brother is traveling home.
DeleteHis pride is more destructive than his pain. Accepting help will speed his recovery. Losing the ability to communicate would be worse than freedom of movement for me.
ReplyDeleteI'm sure it is. His mind has gradually woken after his injury.
DeleteHe's really having a hard time, understandably. A tough snippet but well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks. His state will improve soon.
DeleteThanks. The story skips to his brother next.
ReplyDeleteOh - that list line just rips at my heartstrings. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteGood! He's in a pitiful state at the beginning of the story.
DeleteHe's in a hospice.... Is there no hope for artificial limbs or other prosthetics? His personal pain is so strong....
ReplyDeleteHis alien society despises such artificial attachments.
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