Saturday, January 7, 2023

Karrik says Hello - excerpt for #WeWriWa and #SnippetSunday

 

Happy New Year! I hope you had a restful holiday. 

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday. Sample the work of a new author. Read snippets of stories in different genres.

As promised, I’ll continue with excerpts from Karrik, Book 6 of SciFi series, Taxyon Space. This story has been a challenge to write with six pov characters, including the disabled Karrik. I’m working through the first round of edits where I add descriptions and transitions.

In my previous snippet from before the holidays, Karrik had woken from a nightmare of the attack that crippled him. He wonders about his brothers Alarik and Baswin. He doesn’t know where they are. See https://auroraspringer.blogspot.com/2022/12/snippet-from-karrik-for-wewriwa-and.html

This episode continues directly:

A woman entered. She wore white robes and a white headscarf covered her face, leaving only her eyes visible between the folds of the cloth. His nurse, one of the Pearl Sisters. They looked alike, each one distinguishable only by the color of their eyes and sound of their voices. This sister had blue eyes and a high-pitched voice.

He did not know their names. Had they ever told him? His memories had a big blank gap stretching between the crippling attack until the fuzziness of the present.

The Sister raised his head and held an object to his ear, saying, “Karrik, your brother is listening. Say hello to Brin Alarik.” 

Ten sentences and a few more

He pondered the sister’s instruction. At length, he forced out the word, “Hello.”

A loud voice sounded at his ear, “Karrik?”

The voice plucked at his memories. Was that his brother? His First, Alarik?

The familiar voice grew even louder, “Karrik, how are you feeling?”

Karrik. His name blazed in his mind. Alarik was calling him. He struggled to create the sounds of new words in his mouth. Nothing came out. Only gasps and grunts. At last, he resorted to the same sound he had made before, a shaky, “Hello?” It was a good word and pronounced clearly. He felt proud of this new skill, even if it was inappropriate as a response to his brother’s question.

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14 comments:

  1. Interesting snippet. I hope the brother will make an effort to keep the conversation going.

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    1. Neither Karrik or his brother will derive much benefit from this conversation.

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  2. Nice lead in to this difficult situation. You can feel his disorientation and confusion - even when it comes to his brother.

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  3. You really show how what difficult circumstances he's in. His mind works, but the rest of him doesn't. What terror.

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    1. Correct. He will improve - that's the essence of the story.

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  4. Sounds like he still needs a lot of recovery time. He must feel so confused! Enjoyed the excerpt.

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  5. I certainly felt the character's struggle here. Well done snippet.

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    1. Thank you. His brother will arrive in the next chapter.

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  6. The idea of characters so similar all that is different about them is their eye color and voice is marvelous. I wonder if they have different personalities when you get to know them. He does seem very disabled at the moment, but I'm hoping we see some improvement in him soon. Tweeted.

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    1. Thanks. I'm imaging something like a religious community devoted to caring for the sick. Karrik would love to leave the place.

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  7. Oh.... I can only imagine that what was meant to be a reassuring connection for both brothers is now a source of concern and fret.

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    1. Well Alarik is worried, although resigned to his brother's condition.

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